Here is 3 of the drafts and the final treatment! I am not gonna upload all of the drafts because the changes isn't too big on some of the drafts.
So, I didn’t got those hours I really needed to fix the treatment, but I feel that I got a decent story who follows the 3 act structure. The problem is that it could be wrote more as a treatment should be wrote, but I got some of the things in there. Story writing isn't my strongest side, so I am very happy that I actually managed to write a story that I am happy with, and that I think could have made a good 3d short.
If I had got some extra hours here and there, I would have got more people to read it and made changes if the feedback said so. And I would have made the story a bit easier to read, and removed some of the sentences, and make some of them shorter. That would made the story more like a treatment and made the story an easier read experience for the reader.
About my creative methods, I used the "what if" method, but I didn’t do it on paper. I just used it in my head when I took the train. For me the dentist is the worst place in the whole world, so I wasn’t hard to imagined how the old man would see the dentist. The 1 hour pitch writing was very useful, and I will definitely use it again, because I think I will get better at it if I do it often. I might have used some other creative to methods, but I feel that I got the result I wanted when it comes to the story.
We have to present 2 others stories that have a similar story structure like the one I wrote. I have a hard time finding any that is like mine, but I think that the first lord of the ring movie has some similarities. When Frodo gets the ring we know that this is a problem because we have already seen a flashback where the ring is the problem. He gets to Rivendell and thinks that everything is okey, but he has to take the ring further. It's not quite like my story structure but the best I can find.
A little conclusion to the end. I feel that the story is good, but could have wrote more as a treatment. The story was developed from some creative methods, but mostly a lot of thinking when I had nothing else to do. Overall I am happy with the project.